Past and now, education is too important. Everybody should get education and be student. But,now be student is very hard tomeeting a lot of problem. The most comman problem is accomadation. A lot of studentsdo not decide to stay home or dormitory.Accorting to families both are same but, it has got three differences such as housework, comfort, security.
The first difference is on housework. While you are doing it at home, houseworker is doing students' housework that stay in dormitory once a week. This is easily for students. Also some dormitory have got 2-3 times meal but, you do meals self at home. So, dormitory is first option for them.
Another difference is on comfort. Comfort is cricual because people always want to be comfortable. Therefore, %75 of students prefer to home because they want to be free. Moreover, they prefer to home not dormitory that not be rules. In clearly, home is coming an attractive for youth.
The last difference is on security. Security is everything for families. Whereas dormitory has got security which home has not got it. So, heart of family want to dormitory. As it is good felt to control of children. Impact, the most sensible and important difference is this.
To sum up, stay home and dormitory have got a lot of differences such as housework, comfort and security. Of course when you will decide , many differences start to occur.
your introduction is nice:)
YanıtlaSilhouseworker or housekeeper?
you should contrast house and dormitory better in your first body. maybe you can give examples to make it richer.
your second paragraph is about comfort, but you didnt explain it in detail. I think your should make more explanations about comfort. how are students free at home? what do they do?
the same thing for your third body.
you have written some sentences as you think it in Turkish, so the result is directly turkish translation.
your conclusion could also be richer.
It's good topic and nice thesis :)
YanıtlaSilBut simple criticism, short brief your idea. So, maybe I think like this. According to me, you could write too long :D because dormitory has too many differences with house :))
Good luck to your other sharing ;)
I like your thesis statements and your topic.
YanıtlaSilYour problem,you think in Turkish so your transtlation is very interesting.(but it is funny)
and I agree with you to supporting.
you should develope conclusion paragraph
Because.I think ,it is very important.
hmm I like this topic.the last paragraph shorter than others.If you give examples of the paragraph will rich.you should keep trying:)you can write better than this.
YanıtlaSilOK. I thanks for your commet but I thought I wrote good but I knew my pharaphs are too short :( I'm glad in order to you said my mistakes. Another my essay, I will pay attetion. Again thank you:)
YanıtlaSilYour thesis and concluding pragrafs are good but I think you give a lot of examples and knowledge.
YanıtlaSilyou are right but I can not do :( I am trying give examples, istatics and information.
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